I love this - the images of falling up into the sky contrasting with sliding down the hill, and the enormity of the sky contrasted with the earthiness of lying on your belly. It really works. I love even more that it was written on New Year's Day.
I wanted to say that my very favorite part of the poem is the title. The comma there makes the title just exactly what I wanted it to be.
February 19, 2010 at 1:35 AM
Walking back through the front field at night, after feeding the cats at the barn, we used to lay down and stare up at the stars and feel the enormousness of their distance and what it would be like to just keep falling up into the sky.
Sometimes when we came back that way in the winter, the whole hill would be covered with ice-encrusted snow and we used to lay down on our bellies and slide slowly all the way down.
"Stars, and Ice"
4 Comments -
Hi Jim,
This is beautiful. Peaceful. Evocative. Reminds me of when I lived in Montana, although I never intentionally slid on my belly in the snow!
Love your work!
cory
February 14, 2010 at 9:33 AM
Hello again, Jim.
I thought that I was already following this blog, but apparently I wasn't. I have remedied the situation. Your work is great!
cory
February 18, 2010 at 2:56 PM
I love this - the images of falling up into the sky contrasting with sliding down the hill, and the enormity of the sky contrasted with the earthiness of lying on your belly. It really works. I love even more that it was written on New Year's Day.
February 18, 2010 at 3:33 PM
Thanks to both of you for your comments.
I wanted to say that my very favorite part of the poem is the title. The comma there makes the title just exactly what I wanted it to be.
February 19, 2010 at 1:35 AM