Nice, Gail. Love for sure. I'd rather eat first and takemy chances on her staying. BTW, Mrs. Jim and I watched both Haley's Comet and Comet Kahoutek together after parking on a dark street. ..
Excellent opening line Gail! I like how you book ended this poem with that sentiment. This piece is fraught with emotion and I appreciated your words. Thanks for posting and viva la!
If i ever use that closing sentence of I crave not a meal, only you, you will need to build my coffin. NOTHING comes between me and food. as you can tell by looking. As for the rest of the poem i like it a lot and it does say love
Very . . . VERY . . . Excellent . . . Love, LOVE . . .
August 17, 2015 at 9:29 AM
From Imaginary Garden With Real Toads
Out of Standard prompt...
Pigeon Superstition
I crave not a meal but you
i kiss a bird's feather
and brush the dog
again and again and again
until you're here with me.
the same things i do
to convince you to stay
are done over and over
and you stay
the night we watched
Haley's Comet
i thought you would go
but you stayed
i knew that night
it was your love
that brought you and my love
caused you to stay
the rest was
only pigeon superstition
i couldn't risk you leaving
to wait for Haley's Comet
i crave not a meal but you
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Close this window Jump to comment formNice, Gail. Love for sure. I'd rather eat first and takemy chances on her staying.
BTW, Mrs. Jim and I watched both Haley's Comet and Comet Kahoutek together after parking on a dark street.
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August 13, 2015 at 10:25 PM
Oh, this is good, Gail. "I crave not a meal but you....."
August 13, 2015 at 11:10 PM
Excellent opening line Gail! I like how you book ended this poem with that sentiment. This piece is fraught with emotion and I appreciated your words. Thanks for posting and viva la!
August 13, 2015 at 11:44 PM
I guess trust was born...love how you opened and closed this piece with the same words.
August 14, 2015 at 12:39 AM
I hope that we do not have to have another comet's tail to seal the deal.. it's good it can be just that once...
August 14, 2015 at 4:50 AM
If i ever use that closing sentence of I crave not a meal, only you, you will need to build my coffin. NOTHING comes between me and food. as you can tell by looking. As for the rest of the poem i like it a lot and it does say love
August 14, 2015 at 7:39 AM
Wow, this is good. It's pure love straight from the heart.
August 14, 2015 at 9:19 AM
Gail, that was just awesome, and thanks so much for posting it. Interesting structure on this one.
August 14, 2015 at 9:49 AM
i love the sweet emotion expressed here..
August 14, 2015 at 11:19 AM
Timelessness from one Haley's Comet (1986?) to the next--sweet expression of such love.
August 14, 2015 at 1:55 PM
Very . . . VERY . . . Excellent . . .
Love, LOVE . . .
August 17, 2015 at 9:29 AM