Enjoyed both. (But I liked the one about your hubby even more.)
=)
January 2, 2013 at 5:22 PM
Sunday and time for The Mag!
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FIRST THOUGHT
The length of time
From cig to butt
Is short by most standards
Then it’s discarded
In the streets
In the fields
In the gutters
To travel endlessly
Stripped of tobacco
Stripped of identity
It becomes a filter
A filter of nothing
Whose main purpose
For years ahead
Is to simply exist
With all clutter
SECOND THOUGHT
He waited
He watched
He smoked.
He checked the time
Checked it again
Time ran out.
11 Comments
Close this window Jump to comment formi like the first one best but the last one shows your talent
December 30, 2012 at 2:49 PM
I like the first one best, too.
And it is so true unless you have learned how to field strip it...
December 30, 2012 at 6:04 PM
The length of
Four cigarettes
Decided her fate.
So LOVE that!
December 30, 2012 at 7:00 PM
I like the notion of only the filter being left...observant and metaphoric...
December 30, 2012 at 7:27 PM
Oh my goodness, that ending was awesome!
December 30, 2012 at 9:02 PM
Again . . . your talent amazes me . . .
December 30, 2012 at 9:32 PM
yow! Both are fantastic- but the second one has my vote!
December 31, 2012 at 1:06 AM
nicely done...love the ending also...thanks for sharing
January 1, 2013 at 12:02 AM
The first observation--so true. The residuals linger forever.
Really liked the darker spin on the second.
Two really good Magpies!!
January 1, 2013 at 9:02 AM
Two very different perspectives on the image .... great writing, Gail!
Happy New Year
January 1, 2013 at 11:03 AM
Back to form on that second one, heehee.
Enjoyed both.
(But I liked the one about your hubby even more.)
=)
January 2, 2013 at 5:22 PM