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Time for Jenny Matlock's Saturday Centus.The prompt this week is: 'Has it really been a decade?'
Number of words: 100 plus the 6 words of the prompt. 106 total. Style of writing: Any Pictures: Any you want to share.
“Has it really been a decade?” he asked while brushing and braiding my long hair. I wondered why. I was thirteen. I knew what a decade was.
I didn’t remember Mama but Paul talked a lot about her. He asked me to call him Paul since Daddy made him feel so old. He would always laugh when he said that.
We moved around a lot but that was okay. “It’s just you and me, kid," Paul always said.
Learning a new phrase that morning, Age Progression, I stared at myself on the milk carton.
Then Paul asked, “Kitten, are you ready to play our little game?”
19 Comments
Close this window Jump to comment formDidn't like the thoughts AT ALL but amazed at your Age Progression creativity . . . I need a continuation to 106 words . . .
June 16, 2012 at 7:14 AM
very interesting start to a story. mine needs to be the first sentence
had it been two decades? nothing much changed in the last decade.
June 16, 2012 at 8:19 AM
Super...great 'chill-bump inducing' twist!
Did Elizabeth Smart's kidnapping, a decade ago, influence your writing?
June 16, 2012 at 8:25 AM
Scary because it is so real!
June 16, 2012 at 9:52 AM
Great 106. Made chill bumps appear.
T
June 16, 2012 at 9:53 AM
nice job.
June 16, 2012 at 10:27 AM
EW! That definitely provoked a strong emotion. Well written.
June 16, 2012 at 10:31 AM
Really disturbing.
Well done, Gail!
=)
June 16, 2012 at 11:25 AM
*shudders* I am afraid that is a true reality for many children. We can only hope they will be found.
Good write!
~Naila Moon
http://writing-out-of-the-blue.blogspot.com/2012/06/my-fiancea-story.html
June 16, 2012 at 12:07 PM
You had me right up to the sinister end. I think this is a really good use of 100 words, and I love the concrete images.
Namaste..............cj
June 16, 2012 at 4:58 PM
That was very disturbing. Where does your mind go?
June 16, 2012 at 6:08 PM
Ugh, it started out so nice and then wham what a detour. I guess that's what makes it a creative way to take it, it was very unexpected.
June 16, 2012 at 8:14 PM
Oohh...a little bit creepy there.
June 16, 2012 at 10:17 PM
Wow' can I just say that that was super creepy.?...very well written.
June 17, 2012 at 12:12 AM
Thanks Gail, for another CREEPY 100 words.You captured it all introducing the image of herself on the milk carton. CREEPY!
June 17, 2012 at 7:09 AM
EEEEEUUUUUWWWWW! Gross! Creepy too..What made ya think of that one, girlfriend?!
June 17, 2012 at 8:17 AM
Amazing what you can do with so little words! True, I wanted to vomit my dinner all over the computer, but still, this was great!
June 18, 2012 at 7:22 PM
Gail, you did an excellent job with the prompt. Chilling, but unfortunately, way too true these days.
June 20, 2012 at 11:21 AM
Gail!
Gail!
Wow.
What incredible writing here.
I didn't see the twist coming...and then...
BAM!
This was really incredibly vivid writing.
Again...
At the risk of being repetitive...
WOW!
July 1, 2012 at 8:18 PM