ha nice....gotta watch out for those snakes in the grass...they will take out your ankles....def like the second two stanzas all the more...the transforming butterfly...and the hey if it take s a little rebelling...i rather like dandelions...
i can't tell if you did it right or not because when i read the definition it hurt my brain so bad i had to stop... and the aba and other letters really made my head hurt... i can say the words you wrote go well with the photos... this much i do know.
This terza rima is new to me, and I like it. Unlike the others, that black snake (I hope it is the harmless garden variety) can exist and catch as many rodents as possible!
dVerse~Poets Pub poetry challenge This Thursday our challenge was a Terza Rima rhyming poetry in tercets...what the ??? Anyway, here's my attempt. "The first and third lines of each subsequent stanza rhyme with the second line from the stanza before, so the rhyme scheme is aba bcb cdc and so on. You need at least three stanzas to produce the musical effect of the chain-rhyming."
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Revealed as a snake in the grass,
Injecting your venom
Withdrawing was low class
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My personal prison
Was this empty shell
Newly arisen
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I have rebelled
By floating away
I've escaped your hell
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Close this window Jump to comment formGail,
Was that a snake you found at your place? I really am not a snake fan, I have the shovel and gun ready when in the garden.
May 9, 2013 at 6:53 PM
ha nice....gotta watch out for those snakes in the grass...they will take out your ankles....def like the second two stanzas all the more...the transforming butterfly...and the hey if it take s a little rebelling...i rather like dandelions...
May 9, 2013 at 7:04 PM
Well, hell on the farm today I guess!
May 9, 2013 at 7:54 PM
Enjoyed each of your stanzas and its accompanying picture. Wouldn't want to meet that snake!
May 9, 2013 at 8:16 PM
Interesting array of interlocking rhymes. The verses could stand alone, but the chain unites the progression.
May 9, 2013 at 9:44 PM
Snakes are not a good thing for sure. I think you've done a nice job of using the form to make music out of this event.
May 9, 2013 at 10:37 PM
Don't know about what you said up there for definition, but I like the pictures, Gail.
Have a great Friday!
May 9, 2013 at 10:43 PM
oh nice...i love the image of floating away on a dandelion seed...so weightless...wonderful pics as well
May 9, 2013 at 10:57 PM
I like what you did, almost like a set of interlocking haiga
May 9, 2013 at 11:53 PM
I liked . . . photo and poetic, . . .
Snake . . . not so much!
May 10, 2013 at 4:07 AM
Very nice haiku.
Lynne x
May 10, 2013 at 5:12 AM
i can't tell if you did it right or not because when i read the definition it hurt my brain so bad i had to stop... and the aba and other letters really made my head hurt... i can say the words you wrote go well with the photos... this much i do know.
May 10, 2013 at 6:54 AM
Wow Gail you did it again chills down my spine.... Awesome shots. Hug B
May 10, 2013 at 7:08 AM
This is great! New to your blog, and i love it!:)
~emily rose
May 10, 2013 at 8:17 AM
I'm glad you figured it out. And you didn't use easy words either. Somebody was on the ball today.
May 10, 2013 at 9:12 AM
Nicely written, Gail. I especially enjoyed the clever slant-rhymes on venom in the second stanza.
May 10, 2013 at 9:37 AM
Oh bravo for the terza rima! That's a tricky one. And your pictures to go with it are terrific!
May 10, 2013 at 10:42 AM
Nicely done, Gail.
May 10, 2013 at 12:22 PM
This terza rima is new to me, and I like it. Unlike the others, that black snake (I hope it is the harmless garden variety) can exist and catch as many rodents as possible!
May 10, 2013 at 12:29 PM
A minimalist terza rima! But the poem itself was really good. I much prefer half rhymes to those of the moon/June variety!
May 10, 2013 at 4:04 PM
I thought you did good. I can't do it, that's for sure! :)
May 10, 2013 at 5:17 PM
Cleverly done - like it a lot!
Anna :o]
May 11, 2013 at 11:03 AM
I can picture the weightlessness of the dandelion seed, floating away in the wind - do not like that snake, but well put together and most enjoyed.
May 12, 2013 at 9:53 AM
I love how you are always up for a writing challenge. You bring a different slant to everything. It is enjoyable.
May 12, 2013 at 10:10 AM
A terrific blend of poetry and text.
=)
May 12, 2013 at 12:44 PM
I like it...a lot!
May 15, 2013 at 11:25 PM