Great read. I like your unadorned but completely perfect language. Too many "poets" would want to gussy it up and make it all "serious," but trust me, this works. Mosk (my site is called I Hate Poetry because I hate pretentious poetry, which yours ain't.)
i was laughing with the first 2 lines. a movie i love and have seen half dozen times is my man Bruce in Live Free/Die Hard by the time i got to the reason there are snakes on the staff I was ROFLMAO.. i love this one, really I DO
This is real. Smiled all the way through. This weekend I am traveling to see my uncle, who is dying and very ready to be gone. He is eighty and has lived a good life, hates hospitals so he is very ready for being lifted off.
Your poem reminded me that life is too short.. to go and live! Forget about all the petty issues and most importantly to connect with the people we love..! Good one! :) xoxo
When I leave it should be liking going to sleep.. good to know I live in a country where I will not leave a medical bill at least.
April 22, 2015 at 2:23 AM
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I hear this song whenever I wonder if I ever get a Big C diagnosis. Not going to live 2 months longer if my family's finances are bankrupted with fantastical meds.
Yep, live hard die free, - at that point, like my Uncle, just sat down to family meal, then to fav chair to read newspaper and "FELL ASLEEP", never to awaken on this earth again. I also agree with Country Girl. H to M :)
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Close this window Jump to comment formmade me laugh and agree, too. :)
April 21, 2015 at 10:17 AM
Spoken plain and simple. The devil at the end really got me.
April 21, 2015 at 10:36 AM
At such times, god is our best friend.
April 21, 2015 at 10:46 AM
This one is a song, as I sing the lyrics in my head. Your grandson needs to write the music.
:)
April 21, 2015 at 11:08 AM
Oh that darn devil, he's always stirring up trouble! I say run fast! Run like the wind Gail!
April 21, 2015 at 11:16 AM
Great read. I like your unadorned but completely perfect language. Too many "poets" would want to gussy it up and make it all "serious," but trust me, this works. Mosk (my site is called I Hate Poetry because I hate pretentious poetry, which yours ain't.)
April 21, 2015 at 11:22 AM
You have enjoyed your life and friendships...sounds like a good innings:)
April 21, 2015 at 11:45 AM
"If I leave but one thought
I haven't lived for naught"
Yes! the best legacy we can live behind is a bright, loud, wonderful thought in the minds of the world that says, She lived!
♥
April 21, 2015 at 11:59 AM
I am so with you on this. And that devil...well, run a little faster!
April 21, 2015 at 11:59 AM
i was laughing with the first 2 lines. a movie i love and have seen half dozen times is my man Bruce in Live Free/Die Hard
by the time i got to the reason there are snakes on the staff I was ROFLMAO.. i love this one, really I DO
April 21, 2015 at 12:02 PM
This is real. Smiled all the way through. This weekend I am traveling to see my uncle, who is dying and very ready to be gone. He is eighty and has lived a good life, hates hospitals so he is very ready for being lifted off.
April 21, 2015 at 12:12 PM
I don't want them probing me either. When I go I want to be among nature breathing fresh air.
Wonderful poem!
Lynne x
April 21, 2015 at 12:18 PM
Your poem reminded me that life is too short.. to go and live! Forget about all the petty issues and most importantly to connect with the people we love..!
Good one! :)
xoxo
April 21, 2015 at 12:34 PM
I like this one-and need to get this in writing for my kiddos- no hanging on for me...I'd like to be assured of that before the day every happens.
April 21, 2015 at 12:59 PM
Well done! Very personal, but with a touch of humor too! Hope all is well?
April 21, 2015 at 1:49 PM
Sounds perfect to me.
April 21, 2015 at 2:01 PM
I agree with T. Powell--this needs to be set to music.
April 21, 2015 at 3:05 PM
Fantastic Gail! I loved it, so true. I had enough poking this weekend when I need stiches!
I think that would be good as a rap song or something. Not that I listen to it.
April 21, 2015 at 3:19 PM
Amen and amen!
April 21, 2015 at 4:24 PM
Gail, very fun reflection on what we will leave behind.
April 21, 2015 at 4:40 PM
You will be very welcomed at Heaven's gate.
April 21, 2015 at 5:09 PM
I liked the hard-boiled persona. and I love the jaundiced new take on the snakes of the Caduceus. :)
April 21, 2015 at 5:26 PM
He trailing us all. Gotta outsmart him though
Much love...
April 21, 2015 at 6:25 PM
Oh sounds like a Metallica song . I bet your grand son could make notes with these lyrics . Well done . Thanks for sharing , have a good day !
April 21, 2015 at 6:26 PM
Got your niche girl . . .
April 21, 2015 at 11:39 PM
Yes, live hard die free. I love your declaration of living!
April 21, 2015 at 11:55 PM
When I leave it should be liking going to sleep.. good to know I live in a country where I will not leave a medical bill at least.
April 22, 2015 at 2:23 AM
I hear this song whenever I wonder if I ever get a Big C diagnosis. Not going to live 2 months longer if my family's finances are bankrupted with fantastical meds.
April 22, 2015 at 3:25 AM
Yep, live hard die free, - at that point, like my Uncle, just sat down to family meal, then to fav chair to read newspaper and "FELL ASLEEP", never to awaken on this earth again. I also agree with Country Girl. H to M :)
April 22, 2015 at 6:10 AM
I enjoyed that sting in the tale/tail ! LOL
April 23, 2015 at 4:05 AM
I'm sure there's a very special place God has in mind.....a place where there's plenty of rocks, and water to walk through.
April 23, 2015 at 9:02 AM
I LOVE this whole thing, but especially this:
There's a reason their staff is wrapped with snakes.
=)
April 25, 2015 at 8:55 AM