This is just beautiful indeed - That last verse says it all - "Leaving tracks - Upon our heart, The people we pass- Do leave their mark." We all leave tracks as we trod through life - some are meant to linger a while, while others plod on. Just NICE.
The rhyme and the rhythm of your poem traveled like footsteps for me until I came to the verse at the end, where the "tracks upon our hearts" captured mine. Thank you for sharing this memorable poem, Gail. =D
There's a good few marks to mention, I'm happy to say!
June 20, 2012 at 3:38 PM
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Puddle, 1952, M. C. Escher
The Puddle
Muddy puddle
Reflecting sky
People walking through
People walking by.
So goes our life
Reflecting above and below
Where people trod
To and fro.
Leaving tracks
Upon our heart
The people we pass
Do leave their mark.
17 Comments
Close this window Jump to comment formstraight forward and oh so honest.
June 17, 2012 at 10:58 AM
The path of life. Well written.
June 17, 2012 at 11:01 AM
Yes indeed, they leave their mark.
This is a lovely interpretation of the picture.
June 17, 2012 at 11:26 AM
yes...each touch, glance, word leaves a mark...very nice capture...
June 17, 2012 at 11:48 AM
Yes they do .... I enjoyed your gentle rhyming.
June 17, 2012 at 11:59 AM
Gail,
I love your post and the picture is so beautiful!
June 17, 2012 at 12:19 PM
Yes , they do leave a mark... Lovely !
June 17, 2012 at 1:15 PM
i like this one better.
June 17, 2012 at 2:33 PM
Happier than the previous . . .
June 17, 2012 at 4:06 PM
They do leave tracks on our heart...I love that...
June 17, 2012 at 4:14 PM
This is just beautiful indeed - That last verse says it all - "Leaving tracks - Upon our heart, The people we pass- Do leave their mark." We all leave tracks as we trod through life - some are meant to linger a while, while others plod on. Just NICE.
June 17, 2012 at 4:54 PM
The rhyme and the rhythm of your poem traveled like footsteps for me until I came to the verse at the end, where the "tracks upon our hearts" captured mine. Thank you for sharing this memorable poem, Gail. =D
June 17, 2012 at 8:39 PM
Very nicely done! Memorable!
June 17, 2012 at 9:42 PM
People who pass, indeed leave a mark. Well said. :)
Prose, Poetry and Photography
June 17, 2012 at 11:59 PM
Indeed they do.
As do you!
;)
June 18, 2012 at 5:03 PM
Wonderful contrast of the world within and without. Thanks
June 18, 2012 at 9:01 PM
There's a good few marks to mention, I'm happy to say!
June 20, 2012 at 3:38 PM