this one is cool and i like it lots. it says exactly what i would say if i had one iota of writing talent. yappers make me crazy, barkers make me crazy. and there are times when Jake or baby whine and they are amusing. like when bob is in the back yard and they are in the kitchen, it is a whine that says out out i want out. you could change the word from dog to child and i would feel the same.
Hmm. I love this! Leo is a moaner. And a whiner. And a barker. He seldom growls though--even when he's on full alert. He is deadly silent and then he pounces. Pity the burglar who picks my house on a whim.
Welcome to week ONE HUNDRED AND TWELVE of Saturday Centus from the wonderful Ms Jenny Matlock.
The prompt this week is: 'It's an amusing little whine...' (and, yes, the misspelling is deliberate)
Number of words: 100 plus the 5 words of the prompt. 105 total. Style of writing: Any [Image]
I don’t like a noisy dog
One that growls or barks
I want them to be quiet
As we’re strolling in the park.
I want them to lay silently
At my feet while I read
I want them to look at me
And communicate their needs.
I’ve had yappers
Who drove me quiet insane
Their persistence barking
Stuck needles in my brain
I’ve also had some growlers
That seemed to growl for fun
Didn’t need a reason
They growled at every one.
Now I have a whiner
He does it all the time
But I have grown to love him
It’s an amusing little whine.
19 Comments
Close this window Jump to comment formVery cool! Great job.
June 23, 2012 at 7:23 AM
mmmm let's see what I can do w this: And THAT'S an amusing little Rhyme :^)
Jonell
"Like Gramma's House" blog
June 23, 2012 at 7:37 AM
You were up bright and early with your brain in gear! Nice job!
June 23, 2012 at 7:42 AM
I love this poem. It's me to a T. Wonder if I'll ever experience the last strophe. :)
June 23, 2012 at 8:59 AM
this one is cool and i like it lots. it says exactly what i would say if i had one iota of writing talent. yappers make me crazy, barkers make me crazy. and there are times when Jake or baby whine and they are amusing. like when bob is in the back yard and they are in the kitchen, it is a whine that says out out i want out. you could change the word from dog to child and i would feel the same.
June 23, 2012 at 10:02 AM
Awesome ! I loved it ! Have a good day 1
June 23, 2012 at 10:29 AM
What a clever piece of poetry!! Our Mulligan produces a quiet, one note whine when he wants to get in our laps.
June 23, 2012 at 11:16 AM
This was so cute. Good job.
June 23, 2012 at 11:42 AM
Haha. Great little piece, Gail. :o)
June 23, 2012 at 4:05 PM
You are talented!
June 23, 2012 at 4:21 PM
Hmm. I love this! Leo is a moaner. And a whiner. And a barker. He seldom growls though--even when he's on full alert. He is deadly silent and then he pounces. Pity the burglar who picks my house on a whim.
June 23, 2012 at 5:01 PM
Beautiful, Gail. I love your poem even more because it about dogs. I love my Adi, Beagle Dog.
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June 23, 2012 at 6:05 PM
very cute, Gail!!
June 23, 2012 at 6:59 PM
haha... I totally know what you mean! This was terrific!!
June 24, 2012 at 12:45 AM
...and such an adorable little whine it must be! I just loved the jingle to this little poem you wrote!
June 24, 2012 at 4:16 PM
This is such a good poem in response to the centus. Enjoyed! laurie @ http://dealingwithmyinnercritic.blogspot.com/
June 24, 2012 at 10:09 PM
A good response to a prompt that didn't inspire me enough to make myself stop talking to my son's friends who were over for a BBQ.
=)
June 25, 2012 at 1:22 PM
It's amazing how you can forgive a pet it's faults ... and who doesn't love a good dog!
June 26, 2012 at 11:20 PM
Bravo.
This was fabulous!
I love, love, loved this!
Really, really, really cute!
I wish I would have thought of this!
July 2, 2012 at 8:17 PM