Oh that is such a sad way to live- I'm think my centus (if it weren't flash fiction) could have been this very woman, had she not opened her eyes before saying I do to the wrong man! Yikes! Life is so short! Gotta get the best man!
Wow, you nutcase. People are always murdering each other in your stories and yet, that's what makes them so thrilling. This one was great and you did a wonderful job with the prompt. I coud read these one after another. xox
Oh Wow! My heart is pounding! Such suspense with so few words. Very well done. I really liked this. laurie @ http://dealingwithmyinnercritic.blogspot.com/
I think I've lived in that cabin a time or two in my life.
I'm glad she got away.
October 19, 2012 at 7:07 PM
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It's time for Saturday Centus with Jenny Matlock!
PROMPT: "The leaves crunched under my boots until they didn't."
WORD COUNT - Not to exceed 109 (including the prompt)
STYLE OF WRITING - First person
PICTURES - Any additional
The regular restrictions apply: PG, no splitting of the prompt, play nicely and visit the other links, please.
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The cabin was still standing. That surprised me a little. I’d expected it'd be broken like me. It was built in the back of beyond so isolated it seemed only we were left on this world.
That fall the first days were romantic and tender.
I soon discovered he was always watching me. Nothing I did was right. Writing in my journal or even sketching pictures of the cabin became a personal insult to him.
When he hit me I was shocked but every day became the same.
The ax was the answer. I did it.
I walked away and the leaves crunched under my boots until they didn’t.
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October 13, 2012 at 1:41 PM
oh wow!! There's not much that's as devastating as abuse by someone you love and who is supposed to love you. It does drive people to the brink.
Loved "in the back of the beyond"...nicely done!
October 13, 2012 at 1:44 PM
Oh that is such a sad way to live- I'm think my centus (if it weren't flash fiction) could have been this very woman, had she not opened her eyes before saying I do to the wrong man! Yikes! Life is so short! Gotta get the best man!
October 13, 2012 at 5:55 PM
Wow, you nutcase. People are always murdering each other in your stories and yet, that's what makes them so thrilling. This one was great and you did a wonderful job with the prompt. I coud read these one after another. xox
October 13, 2012 at 6:41 PM
I don't blame her one bit. Wise is the woman who puts an end to it (in one manner or another) and walks away while she still can!
October 13, 2012 at 7:07 PM
I'm shocked! the ax? that's one way to end a relationship. great take on the prompt.
have a nice day.
October 13, 2012 at 10:35 PM
You did it again . . . a bit dark my dear . . .
I have to admit though, I am happy she "out him!"
October 13, 2012 at 10:46 PM
Gail, you are so good at murdering people, you should have been a hit-man! Brava!!
October 14, 2012 at 7:38 AM
Awesome writing.
October 14, 2012 at 9:18 AM
Chilling.
Nice take on the prompt.
October 14, 2012 at 9:50 AM
Oh Wow! My heart is pounding! Such suspense with so few words. Very well done. I really liked this. laurie @ http://dealingwithmyinnercritic.blogspot.com/
October 14, 2012 at 7:33 PM
Great writing...very clever indeed. That is very tight.Mine is here
Have you a ROCKING AND BLESSED WEEK!!!
hugs
shakira
October 16, 2012 at 1:24 AM
Guess he got his, eh?
;)
October 16, 2012 at 4:56 PM
Broken in the back of beyond.
Love, love, love this.
I think I've lived in that cabin a time or two in my life.
I'm glad she got away.
October 19, 2012 at 7:07 PM