A house dripping with dark secrets and controlling husband/father figure. The name Jack seems far too friendly, unless of course he was known as 'The Ripper', then what would those trophies be? An interesting take on this prompt.
May 27, 2012 at 12:00 PM
Anonymous said...
I call it "the list."
There's a list of things you have to have in life, and some of them are people, and they don't really matter, just that they get check marked on the list!!
Your secretive world is a sad reality for too many people. Living a pretentious life fools no one and hurts many. Thank you for this walk through the shadows, Gail. Very insightful. =D
People can be trophies that are never properly loved. I wonder in what other ways Jack profited of his trophies? It sure is a darkly psychological story. Disturbing even. Good job!
Yes, houses can hide many secrets....great writing Gail! :-)
May 31, 2012 at 12:33 PM
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House At Dusk by Edward Hopper
The House That Jack Built
After building the house he sought the perfect mate to match. Next the two perfect children arrived exactly two years apart.
Oh, the secrets those curtains and dark windows covered. To the community Jack was a fine upstanding businessman, but to his family, only paraded on special occasions as if they were prize acquisitions, he was a different man.
Jack had many secrets.
The perfect family huddled in the deep dark corners of the house that could never be called a home.
Tonight Jack was content viewing his other trophies people never saw.
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Close this window Jump to comment formInteresting tale . . . I wonder how often that is the truth?
May 27, 2012 at 11:02 AM
How creepy. It's true that no-one knows what goes on behind closed doors. Our house was the same.
I so 'get' this.
May 27, 2012 at 11:36 AM
Menace behind the scenes...
May 27, 2012 at 11:36 AM
A house dripping with dark secrets and controlling husband/father figure. The name Jack seems far too friendly, unless of course he was known as 'The Ripper', then what would those trophies be? An interesting take on this prompt.
May 27, 2012 at 12:00 PM
I call it "the list."
There's a list of things you have to have in life, and some of them are people, and they don't really matter, just that they get check marked on the list!!
neither good nor bad
May 27, 2012 at 12:17 PM
OK, now I'm curious!!
May 27, 2012 at 2:35 PM
shivers...this def has a creepiness to it....jack sounds like he could be rather sinister....
May 27, 2012 at 3:11 PM
This happens way more than some would like to admit... unfortunatly. You were straight to the point and you did it very well!
May 27, 2012 at 3:50 PM
Keep going I want more ! Awesome ! You could write a book girl . Have a good evening !
May 27, 2012 at 4:54 PM
Your secretive world is a sad reality for too many people. Living a pretentious life fools no one and hurts many. Thank you for this walk through the shadows, Gail. Very insightful. =D
May 27, 2012 at 5:07 PM
People can be trophies that are never properly loved. I wonder in what other ways Jack profited of his trophies? It sure is a darkly psychological story. Disturbing even. Good job!
May 27, 2012 at 5:19 PM
This dark piece conjures up images. Gotta know more...
discontent
May 27, 2012 at 6:59 PM
So true. Many people hide behind images, and lead different lives behind closed doors. This is a good one!
May 27, 2012 at 7:30 PM
A bit of a chill falls with your perfect words.
May 27, 2012 at 9:59 PM
Disturbing! Well done. You really set a mood here.
=)
May 28, 2012 at 1:38 PM
You know that old saying "Behind Clsoed Doors" - nice one Gail - could be quite chilling Stephen Jr.
May 28, 2012 at 3:06 PM
Sadly there are many Jacks out there...thought-provoking take...
May 29, 2012 at 12:13 PM
Yes, houses can hide many secrets....great writing Gail! :-)
May 31, 2012 at 12:33 PM