I love this one, it is so dark, it reminds me of Virginia Woolf although she drowned in a river. There is a high cliff near us that many persons have gone over in despair. Lynne x
This was very good... intense, and so very real. We stand on the cliff and we sink into the water with her. The concern is what state she will find herself in on the other side, will the light be welcoming, or will long for it's warmth as she wanders in the cold?
I try not to wonder how I will die. Hopefully at home with children around me. How terrible to realize you are really not alone..just as you die. Had me scratching my head..but also food for serious thought. I agree with Outlawer, very sad. And yet....and yet...
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Very well done.
Have a blessed Sunday. ☺
July 28, 2013 at 10:42 AM
to dark, way to dark.. well written words, but way to dark...and scary
July 28, 2013 at 10:46 AM
shivers...
kinda sad its only in the end she does not feel alone....
July 28, 2013 at 11:07 AM
No, we're never along up there :)
July 28, 2013 at 11:31 AM
I love this one, it is so dark, it reminds me of Virginia Woolf although she drowned in a river.
There is a high cliff near us that many persons have gone over in despair.
Lynne x
July 28, 2013 at 12:04 PM
This was very good... intense, and so very real. We stand on the cliff and we sink into the water with her. The concern is what state she will find herself in on the other side, will the light be welcoming, or will long for it's warmth as she wanders in the cold?
July 28, 2013 at 12:08 PM
Creepy...chills going down my spine...
July 28, 2013 at 3:26 PM
Oh, this makes me think of Virginia Woolf.
July 28, 2013 at 3:43 PM
Well done although very chilly . . .
July 28, 2013 at 4:51 PM
Your poetry always knows how to dig deep and bring a reaction.
July 28, 2013 at 5:19 PM
Hey love sometimes at the endless lonely is endless oneness Love yea friend those are lovely words.
July 28, 2013 at 6:00 PM
Beautifully written and scary to boot! I would never want to die by drowning! I'm afraid of water!
July 28, 2013 at 6:04 PM
The ending verse gave me goosebumpts ~ Good or bad, its nice to know we are not alone ~
July 28, 2013 at 6:33 PM
We never walk alone! Well done!
July 28, 2013 at 6:42 PM
Yup dark. But it's you.
Good job, Gail. :-)
July 28, 2013 at 7:44 PM
Oh dear-- very sad. k.
July 28, 2013 at 8:29 PM
I try not to wonder how I will die. Hopefully at home with children around me. How terrible to realize you are really not alone..just as you die. Had me scratching my head..but also food for serious thought.
I agree with Outlawer, very sad.
And yet....and yet...
July 28, 2013 at 10:22 PM
Eyes open
inhaling only.
Only in the final moments finding peace...very sad, but very well done and quite a punch in this.
July 29, 2013 at 6:14 AM
whew...ominous! ...shivers...
July 30, 2013 at 11:07 AM
You and your dark side. This was chilling.
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July 31, 2013 at 3:42 PM