It would be hard to find plains free of first blood in this world we've have been aggressive for millennia all over this one. If you find such a place keep quiet about it.
Very impressed with how you dispatched those dozen words with so few pen strokes. It's my first time over here at the Wordle, & it took me a Haibun, 4 paragraphs & a haiku to arrive at the same place.
The essentialness of this abbreviated form brings home the depth of sentiment ... brilliant.
December 4, 2015 at 8:47 AM
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The Sunday Whirl...WordleStalking the nakedriver
with wings of want
she flies the world
seeking clarity
of plains
void of red
empty of first blood
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Close this window Jump to comment formchange the first line to stalking the river naked and there you have me.. he he he
November 29, 2015 at 12:43 PM
I felt this one, my friend. Of course, as you know, I often do with your writing.
November 29, 2015 at 12:56 PM
I love how you captured the mood in such a tightly written poem. Stellar.
November 29, 2015 at 4:35 PM
You are the master of writing concise, yet powerful, poetry!
November 29, 2015 at 5:38 PM
It would be hard to find plains free of first blood in this world we've have been aggressive for millennia all over this one. If you find such a place keep quiet about it.
November 29, 2015 at 5:40 PM
Or stalking naked
brought clarity
beyond red. . .
Not good at these but YOU ARE!
November 30, 2015 at 7:31 AM
There is a sense of ambiguity in this that makes it all the more profound and necessary
November 30, 2015 at 7:50 AM
Nicely concise.
November 30, 2015 at 9:01 AM
Few words loaded with deep feeling!
November 30, 2015 at 9:42 AM
Very impressed with how you dispatched those dozen words with so few pen strokes. It's my first time over here at the Wordle, & it took me a Haibun, 4 paragraphs & a haiku to arrive at the same place.
November 30, 2015 at 12:13 PM
The essentialness of this abbreviated form brings home the depth of sentiment ... brilliant.
December 4, 2015 at 8:47 AM