Yes, that was very moving and I think she was right to end it - such a thing to endure is degrading and her smile showed her happy release. A brilliant take on the prompt ~ Eddie
the ending really was a surprise....very true about the old age and illness.....its scary.....
July 18, 2014 at 1:39 AM
For Magpie Tales
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Those stairs taunted me
With each step
With each call
It was more difficult
To lift my feet and go
With a smile
Illness is an ugly thing
And comes in many forms
As I cared for the ailing
Sickness entered me
One more ring of the bell
One more weak cry
I tried for patience
Love and understanding
I was tried and tested
The final test I failed
Empathy no longer inside me
I ended it
They found her
At
The
Bottom
Of the stairs
I was smiling
23 Comments
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July 13, 2014 at 10:11 AM
I like the perspective you took. For some, climbing steps is impossible.
July 13, 2014 at 10:22 AM
i knew it was gonna be a dark one. :)
July 13, 2014 at 10:40 AM
Oh!! I know this... My grama could barely climb stairs and so for my mother in law... its so tiring for them... a nice poem with a dark side... :)
July 13, 2014 at 10:49 AM
im really sorry for the multiple repetion of the comment gail... dont really know what happened here...
July 13, 2014 at 10:53 AM
That brought us all back to Earth with a bump...
July 13, 2014 at 11:29 AM
Enjoyably dark - well written!
July 13, 2014 at 11:41 AM
Quite brilliant, actually.
July 13, 2014 at 1:43 PM
So enjoyed your poems dark or otherwise.
July 13, 2014 at 1:52 PM
This was wicked fun to read..those stairs where just too much.
July 13, 2014 at 3:45 PM
Darkness swept back in . . .
I'd get short on empathy too
doubt I'd push someone down the steps though . . .
July 13, 2014 at 4:07 PM
Poem a little dark, but entertaining just the same, and I love the worn steps. Also like the Helen Keller quote.
July 13, 2014 at 4:31 PM
This is excellent!
July 13, 2014 at 4:34 PM
Scary but good!
July 13, 2014 at 10:35 PM
Oh no! Now you must run fast, before C.S.I arrives! Hurry.
July 13, 2014 at 11:16 PM
Oh, you've set that up to be perfectly chilling!
July 14, 2014 at 6:02 AM
Yes, that was very moving and I think she was right to end it - such a thing to endure is degrading and her smile showed her happy release.
A brilliant take on the prompt ~ Eddie
July 14, 2014 at 4:10 PM
The ending took me by surprise.
July 14, 2014 at 5:06 PM
Cait said exactly what I was going to say!
July 15, 2014 at 5:22 AM
Is it evil that I laughed when I read this? Sometimes dark tales crack me up.
July 16, 2014 at 5:35 PM
Your ending surprised me...I liked...
July 16, 2014 at 6:28 PM
This is cool. I'm going to have to try this writing challenge.
Yours was brilliantly done!
July 17, 2014 at 4:58 PM
the ending really was a surprise....very true about the old age and illness.....its scary.....
July 18, 2014 at 1:39 AM