I dint like the first stanza in the second para,maybe the word "zulf ke naag das jaate hain" dint appeal to me,Because poetry is a visual treat also,each of the line portrays a dream,a scene which we imagine,the pain which you show is loosing its beauty or the passion is loosing out with that line.I am sorry,i am only trying to say what i felt,hope you dont mind. the last para was excellent,i loved the last stanza very much.
What happened to your template? we are unable to see it.or is it only me?
@Krithika - thanks @alapana - point taken :) the imagery of those lines is not exactly soothing/romantic! I think, it was a result of the thought process behind that poem itself. It alludes to something on the dark side.. no one complained before. Which browser are u using? @dawn - duniyaa se duur yoon tanhaa hi mai chaluun :) @dear friend, create a new blogger ID.. idiot doesnt suit u. Thanks buddy :) @ajay, we share the same name. Saw your blog, liked the design. Thank you too :)
chandni, emotions, anil, manish & rosh, Thanks for your appreciation :) I was away from blogging for sometime now.. Looks like, its going to be so for few more days atleast :( Please do keep visiting and I hope to post something soon.. :))
HI khan, thanks buddy! Long time since i updated this :)
12 February, 2007 02:08
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.......... jazbaa-e-dil ko samjhaa hi nahiin, betaab nazar ko jaanaa hi nahiin tere saath hii chaltaa rehtaa hoon, phir bhi mai tanhaa hoon, tanhaaa hoon...
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24 November, 2006 05:02
I dint like the first stanza in the second para,maybe the word "zulf ke naag das jaate hain" dint appeal to me,Because poetry is a visual treat also,each of the line portrays a dream,a scene which we imagine,the pain which you show is loosing its beauty or the passion is loosing out with that line.I am sorry,i am only trying to say what i felt,hope you dont mind.
the last para was excellent,i loved the last stanza very much.
What happened to your template? we are unable to see it.or is it only me?
28 November, 2006 18:16
jazbaa-e-dil ko samjhaa hi nahiin, betaab nazar ko jaanaa hi nahiin
tere saath hii chaltaa rehtaa hoon, phir bhi mai tanhaa hoon, tanhaaa hoon
waise to insaan bhid mein bhi tanha ho le aur nahi to phir akele mein bhi logon ke saath rahe - saaya jo saath de jaaye :)
Good work
cheers
01 December, 2006 23:38
i like this... i love this...
good one.
04 December, 2006 07:17
Bhai waah. Bahut badhiya
05 December, 2006 08:17
@Krithika - thanks
@alapana - point taken :) the imagery of those lines is not exactly soothing/romantic! I think, it was a result of the thought process behind that poem itself. It alludes to something on the dark side..
no one complained before. Which browser are u using?
@dawn - duniyaa se duur yoon tanhaa hi mai chaluun :)
@dear friend, create a new blogger ID.. idiot doesnt suit u. Thanks buddy :)
@ajay, we share the same name. Saw your blog, liked the design. Thank you too :)
08 December, 2006 20:31
devastatingy beautiful :)
15 December, 2006 06:36
Hello hai ji again se !!!
Aap to aur bhi shair ho gaye hain
kamal ho gaya
completely rocking hai ji beautiful hai ji!!!
Keep Smiling:-)
All d bst !!
19 December, 2006 22:39
Wah! :-)
30 December, 2006 11:05
Naya Saal Mubaarak ho aur aap tanhayi ke andheron se bahar niklein !:)
02 January, 2007 16:11
Waah! this gave a 'mein aur meri tanhaai...' feeling to me, very nicely written.
12 January, 2007 20:02
chandni, emotions, anil, manish & rosh,
Thanks for your appreciation :) I was away from blogging for sometime now.. Looks like, its going to be so for few more days atleast :(
Please do keep visiting and I hope to post something soon.. :))
25 January, 2007 23:52
What a thought, very unique very creative:
reshmi raaton mein aate hain, terii zulf ke naag Das jaate hain
zahareelii yaadon mein GhuTtaa hoon, mai roz hi jeeta hoon, martaa hoon
Excellent, Love it !!!
10 February, 2007 06:45
HI khan, thanks buddy! Long time since i updated this :)
12 February, 2007 02:08
..........
jazbaa-e-dil ko samjhaa hi nahiin, betaab nazar ko jaanaa hi nahiin
tere saath hii chaltaa rehtaa hoon, phir bhi mai tanhaa hoon, tanhaaa hoon...
Wah... I love this one!
27 May, 2007 04:41
Found some time to tune this.
15 February, 2008 11:54