Rewrite 1: death by a thousand needles Rewrite 2: death by shrapnel Rewrite 3: death by medical drip Rewrite 4: loss of a thousand souls Rewrite 5: bleeding by a thousand leeches Rewrite 6: blinking away of a night's stars
Comments: Wasn't that morbid! I moved from methods of death to senses of loss, which are common uses of this cliché. Now I need a stiff drink.
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