Meaning: a sport or effort with minimal gains or losses
Rewrite 1: it's a game of small advances Rewrite 2: it's a game of not-quite-theres Rewrite 3: it's a contest of minor gains Rewrite 4: it's a match of major disappointments Rewrite 5: it's a sport of near misses
More possible rewrites:
Rewrite 6: a game of barely movable objects Rewrite 7: a game of well planted heels Rewrite 8: a game of well defended options Rewrite 9: a game of steel-staked positions Rewrite 10: a game of hard fought lines Rewrite 11: a contest of won'ts Rewrite 12: a match between wills
Comment: This was a tough rewrite for me, trying to find new ways to recast the "inches" in a meaningful way. In the end, I decided to redefine the end-product and not the measurement. In the send batch of rewrites, I wrote about less sports-related efforts. Where would you have taken this?
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posted by Booksville Bookclub at 6:02 PM on Jun 16, 2011
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