Rewrite 1: go through the commotions Rewrite 2: pull a slight-of-motivation Rewrite 3: deliver a hand puppet effort Rewrite 4: pull a dead rabbit out of his hat Rewrite 5: give it less than he's got
Comment: The idea here is to suggest how little life or earnestness there is in the effort. I thought adding a suggestion of sleight-of-hand or faked magic might be interesting, too.
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... Speaking of magic
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posted by Booksville Bookclub at 9:57 AM on Jun 30, 2010
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