tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3020099.post114646357971359279..comments2008-11-18T02:20:02.629-06:00Jesus Alihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02722818768309537539noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3020099.post-1146614811071199772006-05-02T19:06:00.000-05:002006-05-02T19:06:00.000-05:00

coupla comments:<BR/><BR/>joanna:<BR/>overcome is one word (not over come) unless you actually mean that. yuk.<BR/><BR/>i think it can just end with "i believe that growing up with a single parent ... happy and bored." you might say "single mom" or otherwise make that sentence more interesting, but it ends okay there. don't need a kicker. your life sort of supplies that.<BR/><BR/>alisa: the

lisanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3020099.post-1146528838975189282006-05-01T19:13:00.000-05:002006-05-01T19:13:00.000-05:00

In general, I think you are making good progress.<BR/>Joanna = looks good to me!<BR/><BR/>Julia = typo at "next two week(s)"... also, I found the "like dating a William Burroughs novel" simile to be a bit forced, or at least unclear. I think I know what you mean, but then, I've never dated any kind of novel. (am I thus spineless?) (ahh, cut it out!).<BR/><BR/>Amanda = not wild about this

Lanenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3020099.post-1146511955096740732006-05-01T14:32:00.000-05:002006-05-01T14:32:00.000-05:00

But here are some comments regarding the project:<BR/><BR/>In general, I think you are making good progress.<BR/>Joanna = looks good to me!<BR/><BR/>Julia = typo at "next two week(s)"... also, I found the "like dating a William Burroughs novel" simile to be a bit forced, or at least unclear. I think I know what you mean, but then, I've never dated any kind of novel. (am I thus spineless?) (

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